Right then! Now i'm going to have a looky see what aspects of an opticians advert prof's have used that I may have not thought of yet...........................
http://uk.youtube.com/watch?v=2Sbe73D9WnM
Now this one is more like my original idea because it is set in many different locations in terms of how someone not haing glasses effects others. Its about 36 cuts in one minuet so it's quite slow paced my second advert is likely to be this slow as many shots will be focusing on objects.

http://uk.youtube.com/watch?v=TF55tW1bTIw&feature=related
This one has around about 45 cuts and the same principle of my current adverts in that it almost has a genre; with the jump cuts and the close ups. The fact that there are only two characters; One Male and one Female. Again, quite like mine